This is an excerpt from an original novel of mine. Could you please critique it?

Lovely penmanship. I must say, I loved the dialogue the most. Make sure to include more actions. Like when Lucinda comments to Helen about the marriage, you could include actions like Helen pecking at the hem of her dress uncomfortably. Paragraph 4, Lucinda is unfazed by the time spent. Not spend. easily mistaken though. Other than that, I think it will be an absolutely clic story. Spot on, fellow novelist.